Less is more.
One hour was simply not enough to soak up all that Brandilyn Collins had to teach in this too-short class I sat through at ACFW national conference several years ago. I could easily sit through an entire early bird on what she had to tell.
Words fascinate me. More than just stringing them together to tell a story, but words that evoke emotions. Develop a setting. Show the reader what is happening upon the screen we call a page.
And I use too many of them.
|Click on the photo to see the changes Brandilyn made to a certain section of my manuscript.|
One hour was enough to show me that so much more can be said in a stronger way if we use less words and more powerful words.
The key to this is the power behind the words. For example, take the before and after of these sentences I rewrote after Brandilyn's class:
A warm hand cupped Ellie’s elbow and guided her back to the spot where the brown-tinged grass caved under the press of her black shoes.
A warm hand cupped Ellie’s elbow, guiding her back to where the brown-tinged grass caved under her black shoes.
How about another one? One that is a little more dramatic in the changes.
Casey Herringshaw is a homeschool graduate and has been writing since high school. She lives in colorful Colorado where she gets to live her dream stalking--er--visiting with her favorite CO authors.